Tuesday, September 25, 2012

Show Again

Here's another Show Don't Tell assignment about my experience at Bamfield. This one is about when we got to see an amazing display of bioluminescence. Enjoy!

'Excitement sparked through my veins like electricity, energizing me as Mr. Hoyt-Hallet led us down the winding path. The trail was dirt, and tall trees and shrubs loomed over us, moonlight dappling through the trees. My rasping breath was loud in my throat as we navigated down the metal ramp. The night sky was a black abyss, white stars sparkling across it like paint splatters on a canvas. My lungs expanded as I drank in the cool and tangy sea air. After what seemed like forever, we finally placed our feet on the wooden dock that rocked gently on the midnight blue glass like surface.


            Before long we were instructed to move in our bulky, neon orange life vests down the unsteady gang walk, and to lie face down on the damp wooden surface. An odd instruction, I thought, I wonder how this is relevant. But I placed foot after foot in a careful stride to the end of the dock, my stomach a nervous ball of excitement. I folded my legs until I was lying on the dock, and my clothing slowly grew damp with left over seawater.

            My gaze moved from my similar-positioned peers and to the dark depths, and my eyelids widened at the sparkling flashes of light that danced in the water. They moved rapidly, too fast for the human eye to follow. The light mirrored the stars in intensity as they flared and gleamed in the darkness.'

Thursday, September 20, 2012

Make Sure You Show

While in Bamfield, we wrote two paragraphs using the idea 'Show Don't Tell'. This basically means do not tell your readers what's going on, use the five senses to show them. While I enjoy writing, this was still a challenge that I enjoyed.

'I gripped the drenched coils of twisted straw-like material as it hung limp in my white knuckled hold. Salty air filled my lungs when I sharply inhaled as the rope snapped taut. The serene and glasslike water began to froth and churn as the flat-bottomed skiff bulldozed through the deep green liquid, The rope slid harshly through my now frozen digits, and would have been lost to the dark depths had I not driven my heels into the floorboards. With a renewed strength I gambled on my balance and propelled myself backwards, lifting my trembling arms into the air as the net crashed onto the skiff. My face cracked into a wide smile: I had caught plankton.'


Bamfield Haikus

These are a few haikus I wrote during my week long stay at the Bamfield Marine Sciences Centre, which is a beautiful place on the Island. I actually wrote ten haikus, but I've chosen two I am most proud of and here they are!

Frigid ocean air
Chills me from me head to my toes
Where is my warm toque?

Ocean creation
Cool, but so out of this world
I want to see more.

One of the things I strove to do was to use words that describe what I was feeling, yet stayed within the five-seven-five syllable frame that I had to work in.

[I'll add photos later, when I've downloaded them from my camera.]